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Behold, she dangles, helpless in the sky,

Affrighted by the curving earth below:

It beckons so seductively, as though

’Twould be a blessing if she were to fly

"Extinguished by my mother's decree" occurred to me. Or, for a touch of exalted humor, "Extinguished by mater's decree." Though short-footed, either would work fine as a last line. Anyway, I think the poem is well done and I like it. What I wanted at the end I think is a word that snapped a revelation into my mind. In truth though, I think familarity could grow on me. It's already begun doing so.

I was amused and pleased by your tossing in a nod to the superseded style, obviously done as a devil-may-care touch, with whimsical abandon.

David, thx for this pleasing introduction.

I would publish your poem, Dan, were I an editor and you submitted it to me.

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